✍️ Writing Practice ESSAY ENVIRONMENT

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      Diana Diaz
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      @DianaDiaz

       

      The environment is a fundamental piece in the development of human beings. Nowadays most people share the view that, it is highly important to take care of it as much as possible.

      Firstly, it is undeniable that trasportation has changed over the years, and it as influenced in the environment coditions. As a result, the pollution is one of the biggest problems that big cities face at the present moment, which not only affects the citizens but also animals.

      Secondly, rivers and seas are also important to mention because of the huge impact that have in our environment. Currently, the fish hunting witouth regulations by the government, could lead in the lose  of endengared species in a nearby future.

      Last but not least, people´s actions should be mentioned since the gouverment is not the only responable to take care of it. Therefore, small actions could be big enough in order to create a better place.

      In conclusion, children, young adults and adults are ready to create a change. Remeber the words that one day Amelia Earhard said ” The most effective way to do it, is to do it”.

    • #5099

      Jonny
      Teacher
      @Jonny

      Good range of vocab and structures, good organisation. Some minor spelling and grammar errors.


      The environment is a fundamental piece in the development of human beings (unclear). Nowadays most people share the view that (good), it is highly important to take care of it as much as possible.

      Firstly, it is undeniable that trasportation has changed over the years (good), and it as influenced in the environment coditions. As a result, the pollution is one of the biggest problems that big cities face at the present moment, which not only affects the citizens but also animals.

      Secondly, rivers and seas are also important to mention because of the huge impact that have in our environment. Currently, the fish hunting witouth regulations by the government, could lead to in the loss  of endengared species in a nearby future.

      Last but not least, people´s actions should be mentioned since the gouverment is not the only responable to take care of it. Therefore, small actions could be big enough in order to create a better place.

      In conclusion, children, young adults and adults are ready to create a change. Remeber the words that one day Amelia Earhard said ” The most effective way to do it, is to do it”.

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