[Jonny]

Welcome @chaingkim, great to have you!

[Jonny]

🙏🙏🙏

[Jonny]

5 ⭐ – great job. This would definitely pass the Writing part of B2 First.

… to avoid that garbage is garbage having to be put outside the dumpsters.

[Jonny]

Thank you for your introduction everyone.

Hope to meet you soon on a live class.

[Jonny]

Not bad Oscar, but lots of incorrect grammar. I suggest using Grammarly (free) to check your mistakes.

Vocabulary, content and organisation are good.

[Jonny]

Good Diana. Some corrections:

THESE amazing tools
line of disappear ???
these technologies
lead to a fight
there IS a huge amount of information
these amazing places

[Jonny]

Very good Israel, great work.

[Jonny]

Good range of vocab and structures, good organisation. Some of the phrasing is a bit unnatural, e.g.:
We can all agree that individuals have always related business…
Therefore, it frequently enables business people and customers to have a good time and make deals at ease.
So, they can help thinking…

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We can all agree that individuals have always related business people to formal garments. However, dressing casually has become a trend for business people. It is because it has many upsides which are appealing for employees.

To begin with, what people like about dressing casually the most is how comfortable it is. For example, business people often used to wear garments like a suit or a tie in sunny days which created a sense of discomfort throughout the day but now they are free to wear the most suitable ones depending on the weather.

Secondly, dressing casually does not only help employees to feel comfortable but it also helps customers feel in a trustworthy atmosphere rather than just feeling forced to give money. Therefore, it frequently enables business people and customers to have a good time and make deals at ease.

Last but not least, allowing employees to pick out their own work clothes prevents them from spending high amounts of money in formal wear which is often expensive.So, they can help thinking about how to get money for it.

I am of the opinion of that,employees should pick out their own style, as long as it looks professional and be proper to do businesses.

[Jonny]

Good range of vocab and structures, good organisation. Some minor spelling and grammar errors.

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The environment is a fundamental piece in the development of human beings (unclear). Nowadays most people share the view that (good), it is highly important to take care of it as much as possible.

Firstly, it is undeniable that trasportation has changed over the years (good), and it as influenced in the environment coditions. As a result, the pollution is one of the biggest problems that big cities face at the present moment, which not only affects the citizens but also animals.

Secondly, rivers and seas are also important to mention because of the huge impact that have in our environment. Currently, the fish hunting witouth regulations by the government, could lead to in the loss  of endengared species in a nearby future.

Last but not least, people´s actions should be mentioned since the gouverment is not the only responable to take care of it. Therefore, small actions could be big enough in order to create a better place.

In conclusion, children, young adults and adults are ready to create a change. Remeber the words that one day Amelia Earhard said ” The most effective way to do it, is to do it”.

[Jonny]

Hi Diana,

Good attempt. See my comments below.

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“The Secret Garden”

Books can transport their readers to places that they never imagined they could be. This is the case of the book “The Secret Garden” by Frances Hudgsun.

Mary Lenox the main character, travel from India to England in order to live with her uncle since her parents passed away because of a terrible illness “the colera”. It was a nice surprise to find that she could not cry. However, in her heart there was depression, but it disappeared at the moment of meeting his cousin Colin, who with the help of her, he was able to walk again thanks to the inspiration and support that she gave him.

However At first I was disappointed to see that the main character, at first used to (not correct use of “used to” here) behave in a way that is not recommendable for children, but the good thing is that she changes thanks to the meaning of friendship.

If I were you I would read this book (informal for a review), which teaches us that true friends are always there to help us. Don’t miss the opportunity to read this books but also to watch the movie, that I highly recommend.

[Jonny]

Wooo! The first Russian! 🇷🇺 Great to have you Kate.

 

[Jonny]

Very good overall. Some minor errors, but not critical.

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Nowadays, it is well known that relatives and friends have an important role in each people’s lives. They usually are there when we need them and, as a result, they will be in different kinds of situations that we face during our whole life.

Firstly, it is undeniable that with both, people have enjoyable moments. However, with friends people tend to be more confident because they are not under pressure about to behave properly.

On the one hand, when it comes to problems, the family is the one that usually is there for us to give us their support. Furthermore, when we face a bad situation, it is easy to realize who is there for us.

Last but not least, people tend to have more interaction with the family members, as we grew up with them. Therefore, they know our character, how we are and how we feel.

In conclusion, from my point of view, people will always have the support of their family, withouth matter (regardless of) the background, where we came from or our personal interests.

 

(I was a little confused with essays, for example here I didn´t know if I should write including me with “we” or use “people (they)” – Either “we” or “people” would be fine.

[Jonny]

Very good Israel. Just a few small errors, but good range, content and easy to read. Good tone too. Great job.

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Nowadays, either people or companies all over the world are facing up competitive scenarios. RECRUITING high qualified employees is a clear example of this, hence many big companies should come up with new approaches to attract and keep the best ones.

To begin with, companies that want to succeed must bear in mind that having an exceptional work team is the key to that. Therefore, there should be an approach so as to provide them with fair wages and benefits according to their qualifications.

Secondly, to encourage employees to keep acquiring useful knowledge as they are part of the company is essential to avoid an EARLY departure. For example, training four times a month about interesting or unknown facts of their jobs would help a lot to keep the best employees.

Finally, training and fair wages should be complemented by a pleasant work environment where employees feel excited about working. It will cause many employees not to feel the need to look for a new job and their loyalty will INCREASE as well.

I am of the opinion of that, every attempt to recruit or keep high qualified employees should be done with the intention of helping them rather than harming them in their personal development.

[Jonny]

Good essay Debora. Spelling and grammar accuracy, the content are good. You have a great range of vocab and expressions but some of the passages are a bit hard to read because I think you use too many. Try not to overcomplicate things.

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To get started, I would like to bring the focus to the fact that parents monitoring their children’s online credit cards purchases is an acceptable proposal. They do it in a bid to better look after them. Yet, if youngsters do not make mistakes, how are they going to learn?

They are all supposed to go through hardship for the sake of growing personally. Rather, not all that glitters is gold and not only do parents pay all or most of their expenses but also they have a right to know what they are spending their money on.

It is high time that many youngsters and parents realise that leaving students open to shopping online without any control, GETS them into trouble. Hence, this measure could keep a lot of them from getting into it.

Parents indeed end up paying for their kid’s (children is better, kids is informal for an essay) mistakes, and that is not fair. They have to learn by themselves and being aware of what is right and wrong, or otherwise, this will have far-reaching effects in their future lives.

IF I WERE THEM, I would control over their kid’s credit card use so that it might save families a lot of money. In a nutshell, this proposal for a new law will bring a new way to monitor the student’s purchases to make safer their online movements and anytime they feel some invasion of their privacy, they could always pay in cash.

[Jonny]

Good structure and ideas Oscar. Some of the grammatical structures are not correct and difficult to read. I suggest you practice using these to improve.

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Although directors commonly believe film audiences will be upset unless there IS
a happy ending, in fact, it sometimes spoils the story because real life isn’t like
that.

In the first place, Throughout history, from the cinema started, people usually went
to the cinema to relax and HAVE an enjoyable and pleasant time (IN ORDER) TO forget their
problems. People appreciated some topics more than others. The subject, people
have MOST preferred more along times, HAS been “love”. ANOTHER theme which has been demanded a lot
too have IS war. Why would they prefer it? It would be due to the fact in theses
films reflected themselves. For instance, Americans liked war films finished
defeating enemy.

Nowadays, contrary to what people preferred in the past, a huge number of
people admired (use a different word) watching a film which finishes as it ends in the real life. In relation
TO love, no one would dispute the fact (✅) people can BREAK UP with theirs PARTNERS
during their lives, or USA doesn’t win war every time. Another major reason, if films
always end delighted it will cause people are bored and dissatisfied with them
provoking people give up go to cinema.

Taking everything into consideration, I strongly believe directors should create films
similar to writers make. Many arguments with many situations, about history,
pass, present, war, love, etc… but it should always be similar to our life.

 

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